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文书点评:本科申请文书——民族音乐(Folk Music)

2008-2-27    美国留学网

Looking back upon my life in high school, I always remembered the experience of taking part in extracurricular activities and the most impressing one was named “Folk Music into Campus” .

At that time, I organized a group of four students, and was nominated as the leader of this group, which made me feel exciting and the responsibility was heavier.

Then we began our works. Some of us were responsible for searching different kind of music such as palace music, literator music and sacred music and I was responsible for the folk music. It was really an arduous duty and I began my work.

First we carried out the test investigation and study in campus. With the dual influence of western music and pop music, folk music as one of the main forms of the traditional culture has slowly separated from the mainstream of the music. Although we knew our voice was low and our power was limited, we just wanted to say something for folk music and reminded people that where did the music originate from. Because of the lack of experience of investigation and propagandize skills, we hardly advanced at the very beginning. Every time we gave students the paper of questionnaire, they threw it away without giving a glance. Even if some of them read the paper, they would say, Folk music? Are you kidding? It’s the time of the “Idol music”, who will listen to this kind of music, why not go to ask my grandma? According to that, we changed our way to work. Under the music teacher’s help, we organized a group of students, who know folk music quite well, to hold a small party about folk music in on Saturday evening; gave every student who was at the party a test paper; and so on and holding the folk music knowledge compete. To our surprised, our investigation advanced smoothly and we tasted the success first time.

Next, we should do investigations outside school. I went to a park with my partners on a sunny weekend as usual, taking tapes, radio and a pair of self made sound boxes. We chose a corner in the park as our position. With the beautiful folk music’s notes flew away, there was so much expectation. However, after along time, nobody took care of our questionnaires. Suddenly, it began to rain and the passers-by were fewer and fewer. But I didn’t know why all of us didn’t want to leave even if we were wet. And I thought it might be because the music was so beautiful. After a while, there appeared the miracle. The corner became crowded. People came to ask us and did our questionnaires, taking umbrellas. Meanwhile, those colorful umbrellas made up a pretty ceiling. Thanks to that miracle, we not only completed our investigation task, but also were intoxicated with our exciting answers.

If success is a gate, the road to this gate must be made up of difficulties.

After one-year’s gestating, we tasted the sweet fruit. The topic of “Folk Music into Campus” was accepted by our school and then, holding a large-scale of popularizing and propagandizing activity.

I was so proud of this result and the cherish I harvested is the whole course of doing the thing. The connotation of the Folk music impressed me deeply and my heart has been sublimed. I became more confident and responsible. Even now, I also think that what I reaped at that time was more than I had thought.

点评:

本文是一篇小Essay,主题是通过自己的一段经历,一方面反映了自己的兴趣爱好,另一方面,也从侧面展示了自己的性格方面的特点以及能力。

文章的作者作为一个小团队的领导者,负责了整个宣传活动,其间遇到了不少的困难,包括宣传手段的选择、组织活动的方式、活动的人员安排等等。在一一克服了这些困难之后,最终取得了良好的宣传效果。在这个过程中,体现了作者的组织能力,以及处理问题的能力,由于小Essay的篇幅都要求不能太长,所以要以最简单的语言最大限度的表达好所想要传达的信息。

整篇文章中,情景结合,两者很好得结合在了一起,尤其是结尾的一段总结性的内心独白,起了画龙点睛的作用,总的来说,是篇比较精彩的一段经历描写。

译文:

民族音乐

回顾我的高中生活,参加兴趣小组活动的经历让我印象深刻,其中高二伊始的一次名为《民族音乐走进校园》课题的活动经历,让我尤为记忆深刻。那是一次四人组成的课题小组,我被推荐为小组组长,这让我既高兴又觉得身上的责任更重了。

确定了课题后,由我相应做了分工,她们负责搜集宫廷、文人和宗教音乐,民族音乐归我。民族音乐是大头,为了制作一个有关民族音乐的问卷调查,我开始了艰辛之路。

首先着手在校园的问卷调查。作为传统文化主要形式的民族音乐,在西方音乐和流行音乐的双重影响下,已逐渐淡出了主流文化。我们知道我们的声音很小,我们的力量有限,但就是想为民族音乐呐喊几声,提醒一下人们,我们的根来自何方。由于缺乏调查的经验和技巧,开始一段时间,我们进展得并不顺利,当我们每每向同学们递出一张问卷的时候,他们看也不看就扔掉;有的即使看了一下,却说,民乐?谁要听?要不问问我奶奶去。对此,我们改变了策略,在校音乐老师的帮助下,组织了一群有一定民乐素养的同学在周六晚上开了一个民乐小party,向参加的同学们发了一份问卷,还开展了民乐知识竞答。于是,我们的调查进行得意想不到的顺利,初次尝到了胜利的滋味。

下一步是校外调查。我选了一个晴朗的周末,像往常一样和同学一起带着唱机、磁带和自制的一对音箱等,选取了一个公园的一角作为阵地,随着美妙音符的飘出,我们的心中也充满着期待,可是大半天过去了,仍无人问津。这时又下起了大雨,路上的行人渐渐少了,真是屋漏偏逢连夜雨,但不知为什么,虽然我们全身都淋湿了,一个也没想走,也许是音乐太美了。不知什么时候开始,人渐渐多了起来,大家撑着雨伞围着我们问这问那,一会儿功夫花花绿绿的雨伞组成了一个缤纷的天空,我们的问卷不但完成了,还为自己精彩的解答而流连忘返。

如果说成功是一扇门,那么通向这扇门的路就是用困难铺成的。

一年的孕育,终于结出了甜美的果子,在做完一系列课题研究后我们提出的一个关于“民族音乐走进校园”的主题被学校采纳,并在校庆后举行了为期一周的民乐推广活动。

我非常满意这样的结果,但我更珍惜的是课题研究的过程.在这过程中,不光作品本身丰富的内涵陶冶了我,让我的心灵得到了洗礼和升华,同时也让我也增加了升自信心和一份对社会的责任感,这些都是我开始所没想到的。


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